Wednesday, April 2, 2008

NaPoWriMo-Day 2 and 3WW

Parallel Bounce Mysterious
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Skinny Dipping

We turn off of route 16
and follow parallel tracks
down a dirt
road to Emerald Pool.

We sit on a big
rock overlooking
the water. The sun
covers us like
an electric blanket.
The heat from the stone
is charcoal briquettes.

Soon only our clothes
are left on the ledge
as we play in the cool
water. I feel my breasts
bounce around
like bubbles.

I dive deep
into gray-green
twilight as mysterious
as outer space
as mysterious
as us,
as mysterious
as the poems
I don’t even know
I will write yet.

15 comments:

Tammy said...

I really enjoyed how you used these words especially bounce. ;)

pia said...

I liked the ending as I never know what's going to come out

Jujee said...

Lively and with a nice summery feeling to it

tumblewords said...

Surprise ending and lovely images throughout!

paisley said...

oooohhh that was nice... i was immersed in it ... from first to last....

Leigh Lear said...

this was very nice.

Leonard Blumfeld said...

I like the contrast between the heat imagery at the beginning and the mysteriousness of the pool in the second part - nice counterpoint.

Greyscale Territory said...

Smiled when I read the last few lines!

A beautiful, fun poem!

Gemma

watermaid said...

'Breasts bounc[ing] like bubbles' - if only - and 'the poems/I don't eeven know/ I'll write yet'. I enjoyed reading this.

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christine said...

a stunning poem. I was in the Emerald pool, luxuriating in the hot rocks, feeling the weightlessness of my body in the water, surrounded by nature, love of the present.... Wonderful.

anthonynorth said...

Another good job. I never even thought of using 'bounce' like some of you have :-)

TC said...

Sigh. I totally want to go :)

gautami tripathy said...

Good use of bounce!

parallel plot

Deborah Vatcher said...

The contrasting and varied sensory and mystical experiences in this poem are keenly and delightfully portrayed. Enjoyed this!

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