Totally Optional Prompts suggested we use the following words in a poem. I managed 3 out of 4: black mice, durien sherbet, a rust storm. blinking lights
I peek
out my bedroom
window
to see his back-up
lights blink on
and his truck
leave the driveway
before getting
out of bed
and turning
on my computer,
a blue sun
in the middle
of the foggy
morning.
Then words
like black mice
scurry across
my screen
and the rust storm
of dry regret
becomes dust
that I can blow
away with the click
of a key
or save
as a document
of a mistake
disappearing
in red taillights
through the gray mist.
7 comments:
Random has order here!
acuity of touch
Deep and searching. Great words.
There's just a hint of a confession here, in the final stanza, or is the foggy morning getting to me?
Nicely!
'rust storm of dry regret' a fine phrase! Lots of vivid imagery in this piece - really enjoyed it...
Random, it is and so is so natural..
Nice work with words, so random!
Good use of the prompt words. As for dry regret - I'd just click the 'delete' button and put it down to experience.
Fantastic! I love how you used the prompt words, very creative. They seem like they were made for this piece, which is hard to accomplish.
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