I went to ReadWritePoem and used their prompt generator to get 5 five words that I hoped I could produce some sparks with: willow, pell-mell, swerve, pleat, cedar. It didn't really work all that well, but this is what I came up with, anyway.
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As I swerve
into my sixties,
I can feel the steering
wheel of my life
shuddering.
The scenery
is changing:
leaves falling off
the weeping willows,
cedars bending over.
The road feels like
it is pleated, now.
I bounce along,
hoping I never have to
shift into Park.
16 comments:
had i not known,, i would have thought this came completely free of inspiration.. it is such an easygoing move,, you moving thru life...
Yow. I got goosebumps. Park is not high on my list either. Nice, nice work!
I like the car metaphor, I drive a manual, usually. In England we drive on the left hand side of the road, but when I go to France, I have to drive on the other side of the road. I don't mind driving on the wrong side of the road, what I don't like is driving on the wrong side of the car!
You have told this tale in such a unique way, just wonderful!
This is wonderfully evocative... great tone and shows what pushing sixty feels like.
Can relate to this. Chapeau!
I love this, esp. the tree images. Nice.
and--have you ever tried "coyote cult's" word generator? It gives you ten words at a time.
http://coyotecult.com/tools/randomwordgenerator.php
Wonderful, wonderful...
This was beautiful.
And I know I'll quote this and feel exactly this when I get to sixty. :)
Linda, I've been driving that car for the past six years, you get use to the road. Great poem, made me laugh. Good use of metaphor. Thanks.
DH
Very nice. The metaphor usage is really good.
This is really good.
abstracting
love the imagery here..
This is wonderful. I love the shuddering steering wheel and the road that feels pleated. Will we ever get to a place where we welcome a shift into "park"?
very nice for sure.....car metaphor is good
I like your image of the shuddering steering wheel. Heck, I even sometimes feel that way -- and I'm almost 33. Good write.
-Nicole
Mutiny in Six Parts
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