Thanks to Gautami Tripathy for this great first line.
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That word you lost I found it under a rock
all dirty and flattened.
I took it home and washed it
then hung it on the line
in the sunshine to dry. See it there
sashaying in the breeze
becoming plumper and clearer
as it dries. The T is holding
its head up and the rust
is shining. That word you lost
I found it under the rock
of your heart.
9 comments:
Great poem. I like the concrete aspect the first line gives to the vague sense of 'word.' Good stuff.
Like the sashaying and how you chose a word and split it into 2 images.
i like the image of a word sashaying!
i like the final "the rock of your heart" is amazing..
I like the way this started and ended. Adding the word heart added a wonderful meaning.
Thanks Linda, for using my line! You did a great job of it. Loved the way it created vivid images in the mind!
over the ridge and hard planes
loved this poem :)
I like the way you build on the first line and then bring the reader back to where you really found it - 'I found it under the rock of your heart.'
Nicely!
Wow! I like how you structured this, and the last couplet is very profound. Awesome write.
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