Saturday, October 4, 2008

Forbidden for Sunday Scribblings

Only the moon
at us

the stairs
to the ski


bursting out of me
in nervous

my shaking hand
around the neck
of a Michelob

you sitting
next to me

I lose
in the moon
of your eyes.


Robin said...

The circumstances are different, but this evokes memories of my own past. Thank you for putting a smile on my face as I remember times gone by.

Dar said...

This is wonderful Linda-like Robin says it brings back memories. I love the shaking hand around the neck of the Michelob bottle-that made me smile.

Skyelarke said...

Beautiful! I'm smiling :-) Love that line: "lose myself in the moon of your eyes"

Giggles said...

At times this is just what we need to add a spark to life!! I so get this poem, so would all my goddess friends!! Love the honestly behind it! As always you are one of my favorite poets!

Hugs Giggles

Heidi Alfonzo said...



Awareness said... the nervous intimacy of this. Like Robin, your poem evokes sweet memories for me as well.... lovely thoughts!
thank you for your comments on my piece. i appreciate the feedback.

Anonymous said...

This is simply delightful

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Nicely written, almost naughty!

anno said...

Wonderful poem! I especially loved the "daring/ bursting out of me..." Seldom has a verb made me quite so happy as this one did.

SmallWorld at Home said...

Beautiful. I love the nebulous quality of the poem and then the very solid reality of a Michelob bottle.

Angel said...

Very romantic and quirky!

anthonynorth said...

Perfect romantic nostalgia. Loved it.

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

I'm with Dar and Robin. Except this made me actually miss those days and maybe even yearn for them to return.

totomai said...

i dont know if its intentional on your part, but i love the "fasterandfaster" line without the spaces.

an intense write

Rambler said...

nice and romantic :)

Granny Smith said...

The ski jump to forbidden! You capture so vividly the anxious, wonderful moment.

Lucy said...

just beautiful!

tumblewords said...

Wonderful - it makes me yearn to go back to that first/first with a bottle in hand!

katanalyze said...

Great job- your use of suspense is especially good.

Neilina said...

When I started reading the poem, I took it very differently, more with the outside world but the end made me to realize it is more of inside us. Just loved the way you ended the poem.

susan said...

As a teacher, I think you can appreciate me saying you rock!

I really enjoy what you do, Linda. Please consider sharing an oldie, overlooked gem at Little Lovin' Monday.

Beth said...

Your poem brings back those days when love was new, the doubts, the insecurities, and that sense of losing a sense of identity "in the moon of your eyes." Lovely!

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