Thursday, November 15, 2007

Totally Optional Prompt for Nov. 15: Neighbors Saw

This Is What the Neighbors Saw

At first,
A campfire
licking the stars,

an empty
Coors Light can,
a half-filled
margarita glass,

two people
dancing
to “Beautiful Tonight”
on the deck.

Later,
smoldering embers,
a deserted deck,
lights winking off
in the camp.

10 comments:

Tumblewords: said...

Lovely 'place'!

Annie Jeffries said...

Very romantic. I can smell the campfire smoke.

Crafty Green Poet said...

You really recreate place with very few words here, excellent

Rethabile said...

Cool. I like the mood we leave the poem with.

Anonymous said...

That's quite lovely.

(Here via TOP.)

Andy Sewina said...

You've definately captured the sense of place - but, I wonder what the neighbours thought?

Anonymous said...

Great last stanza!

Odessa said...

very romantic. love the image of lights winking off.

Anonymous said...

Maybe the preface to "How to get a live."

Anonymous said...

Concise & slight in length but full of atmosphere.

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