Wednesday, June 29, 2011

3WW: Bump, Knuckle, Transfix

I like to slide
out of bed early

like a letter
out of an envelope

without bumping
anything

so he won’t wake up.
But he stirs

and his first command
of the day

hits me like a knuckle
sandwich. “Turn

the air off.” Yes,
master. He falls back

to sleep and I become
transfixed by the morning.

Today, the trees
are entangled

in a hairnet of fog.
The oak leaves

are shiny as rubber
gloves from the dew.

I sit in the silence
with myself

but only
for a little while.

16 comments:

jaerose said...

Fantastic imagery..I like the idea of sliding out of an envelope each morning..I am glad that the silence wasn't for long..Jae

gsb3 said...

I, too, liked that line. The every-dayness of the relationship is nice next to the small natural escape. We all need that. Nice job.

verseinanutshell said...

Nice work with words and imagery. My 3WW: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/06/29/next/

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

Great imagery.

Alice Audrey said...

I like the way this flows to a gentle conclusion.

Laurie Kolp said...

I love the strong images, beautiful language here, Linda!

Kim Nelson said...

Effective and moving! I want to shout to her... "Run!" "Leave!" "Now!"
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/06/29/another-saturday-night/

A Kwee Life said...

Fantastic images. I loved the hairnet of fog. That's great.

Jingle said...

magical,

love the nature imagery.

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

keep up the excellence.

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Nara Malone said...

Oh wow. Sliding of bed like a letter from an envelope, hairnet of fog, oak leaves as shiny as rubber gloves...you just strung beautiful images together. Love this.

imnotaverse said...

I really enjoyed this. I can't decide if she's a slave/servant or sarcastic and not a morning person. I like the ambiguity.

Altonian said...

A beautiful, sensitive poem. I think she wishes she could enjoy her silent solitude longer. The 'yes master' comment said it all for me. I agree with Kim Nelson.

Fiducia said...

I smell of slavery here...But yeah, our e'day tonic of tasks are no less than one! Well portrayed...Nice use of words and the simple form was awe-inspiring...the last two lines being the best!

Shauna said...

very interesting, a haunting quality sadness.

Nico said...

Touching, sad, vulnerable, beautiful. I like this very much, Linda!

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