He started by running his finger
along her thigh
to make her gasp.
By that time she was awake
and knew there was no way
she could slip out of bed.
She rolled over and saw
the question
in his boyish eyes.
What other way is there
to quench the flame?
She nodded her tangled head
ready to defy
the alarm’s insistent buzz.
The sunrise was a parade
of smiles. She reached out
turned off the alarm,
got up. Just a typical morning.
19 comments:
What?! She got up? I didn't expect that.
"The sunrise was a parade
of smiles." Beautiful line & intriguing poem
A very surprise ending. I wasn't expecting that. Nice!
Pamela
You made a poem of my recurring dream.
What a great start to the day! I enjoyed this.
I'm thinking she got up AFTER. :) Nice work!!
Great job of painting the scene...ending caught me completely off guard...great. Vb
Fun ending. I enjoyed what you did with the Wordle.
My thought is, she got up in the aftermath..:D
rivulets of space
Due to Census work for the past one month, I have not been able to visit and comment. I will be back with a vengeance after a day or two!
The ending was quite a surprise.
I wish that wasn't a dream. I was loving the flow ;)
Ahhh...just another day! An unexpected ending. Nice one.
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that ending is a killer. because you wonder what really happen then.
Agreed, "parade of smiles" is beautiful.
Very effective ending to a well written poem. Like other readers, I really dig that "parade / of smiles." line.
hi linda love yr new blog and your header... oh man daffodils and tulips... im already searching for the crocus to start popping outta the snow... great post to the wordle the words melted so lovely... too bad, she missed out...
wow, what a complete and fun story.
here is mine:
http://itistimetothinkformyself.blogspot.com/2011/03/big-tent-poetry-in-55-words.html
Thanks for reading.
Demanding written with an unexpected end. I enjoyed it.
Demanding written with an unexpected end. I enjoyed it.
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