Monday, August 18, 2008

In the Moment for ReadWritePoem

The morning is green
freckled with gold and blue

as I sit under the exclamation points
of pine trees

on this, the last Monday
of summer vacation.

Wooden clothespins
look like gymnasts

holding handstands
on uneven parallel bars.

An American flag
waves at the sun.

The silence
of chirping birds.

Then my husband wakes up,
turns on the TV,

and fills the silent spaces
with his questions

that batter like bats
obliterating the beauty.

I stop writing my poem
and begin to make breakfast.


Brian said...

Wonderful poem in the moment Linda.

I tried, but my moments are spent watching Tropical Storm Fay right now.

Lirone said...

I think I would go quickly mad if I lived in a house where the TV was always on... such a distraction! Glad you were able to enjoy this beautifully peaceful moment first!

anthonynorth said...

Yes, we must reserve special moments in our own imagination, taking ourselves away from the world.

gautami tripathy said...

Fluidity of moments...

Liked it.

plunging in the tunneled abyss

Giggles said...

Oh how I know this feeling well.... I have often read the same line fifteen times because of it! Well put!

Hugs Sherrie

Annamari said...

I can relate to the peacefulness of early mornings when everybody else is asleep. And then when everybody wakes up it all goes away in an instant. You do a great job re-creating the quiet moments before and the sudden stop…

Annamari said...

I am really curious, but what were you expecting when you read my attempt?

odessa said...

great capture of a moment! i especially like comparison of wooden clothespins and gymnasts because well, i'm kinda obsessed with the olympics, particularly gymnastics! :)

Crafty Green Poet said...

I like the reference to gymnasts and also the exclamation points of pine trees. Very well observed and full of detail

christine said...

Wow, what wonderful metaphors, the pines, the clothespins, you drew me into the moment, into your domestic scene of waking. Great writing.

AmbiguityLotus said...

I think the format of this poem fits perfectly with your choice of words!!

And even some stanzas made me laugh because of the Olympics fever going on, too.

Wonderful! I simply enjoyed this poem.

Also, I thank you so much for visiting my poetry journal on Livejournal! :)

Jennifer said...

I love the sudden shift in this. The language in the first half, where you describe your moment, is lovely - loved "freckled with gold and blue" the use of freckled instead of something like speckled is so fresh.

Michele said...

Wow, I loved this. What imagery! I was right there.

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