Sunday, October 25, 2009

Elusive for One Single Impression

This poem popped into my head as soon as I saw the prompt. I wrote it almost 20 years ago when I first started writing poetry and everything had to rhyme. What on earth I was upset about, I have no recollection. Maybe nothing since I remember that winter in Bradenton as being a really pleasant one. Maybe I was just exercising my poetic license to be dramatic.
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Barren

My heart is a part of the desert.
My soul is a hole in the sand.
My cares and affairs are all shriveled
suppressed by this desolate land.

My need is the greed of the thirsty.
My wants are the haunts of the mind.
Desires are spires of longing
elusive, delusive, and blind.

3/16/91
Bradenton, Florida

22 comments:

SandyCarlson said...

Desires...how they shape the soul in their elusive way.

PS : De-abbreviate as you like ;) said...

This can make sucha lovely sad song ! lovely :)

Loch Rob said...

To be thirsty and lost in the desert. Blind desire, driven by needs and wants. Very well done!

Jeeves said...

Wow.....

Amias said...

20 years ago huh ... well you took some very good poetic license here. I especially love the way you used elusive, delusive and blind ... that is so true for many today!

Sweetest in the Gale said...

The rhyming makes it flow so beautifully...and the words have such depth and meaning. Wonderful!

Glowby said...

This flows so naturally. Yes, like a song.

anthonynorth said...

Great flow to this, and real depth, too.

if said...

words full of feeling...

Felicity said...

Perhaps it's because I've been feeling rather despondent lately, but this poem really touched me. I could relate to it very well. Thank you for sharing this. :)

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Oh yes how true your words are. Well done.

love, Melanie

Maggie said...

Your pen sure was not barren as this poem flowed so well and it is timeless.

Jim said...

Hi Linda, you ending is extra nice in my book, "Desires are spires of longing elusive, delusive, and blind." I still like the rhyme and meter thing here too.
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Tumblewords: said...

Two decades old and this piece still hooks and leads. Nice, oh nice!

JP/deb said...

Definitely a dramatic poem! Funny after 20 years you have no connection to the emotional history of this poem ... I've been there!

Cheers,
JP/deb

Yellow Tulip said...

wow:)...very lovely poem dear:)..jus loved it:)...

Jukota said...

I don't write many rhyming poems, but I love a good one, and this one was awesome! My favorite line: My soul is a hole in the sand... Wow!

Shraddha@theselfloveproject said...

yeah!this longing is so tough..

very nice post..

fourwindshaiga said...

Glad you kept it. I think we have all felt that way at one time or another.

Leo said...

sad.. so poetic!! desires are elusive, delusive and blind. indeed they are!

Tammie Lee said...

this is a wonderful piece of accountability for desires, needs and wants.
Fun that you pulled out an old piece.
Spirithelpers

Patti said...

I love the line "My wants are the haunts of the mind." ...this is very true. Nicely written!

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