Wednesday, December 9, 2009

Lithe, Grave, Offend for 3WW

The lithe snowflakes twirl
in the sad, offending wind~
I fall on his grave.

10 comments:

anthonynorth said...

A stark last line. Powerful.

ThomG said...

stark and powerful, yes. Visual, too.

Joshua St.Cyr said...

Very short but the message is convey so powerfuly!
Very deep!

Joshua St.Cyr said...

By the way I have one poem up on "One single impression" check it out hope you like it.

gautami tripathy said...

I love that last line.

gravely offended

Tumblewords: said...

Strong haiku! Nicely worked.

PS the Pratsie said...

read such a wonderful haiku after loong !

wordvamp said...

I love this, the last line took me for sure.

fourwindshaiga said...

The last line got me, too. but there were clues. I love it.

swapnap said...

It spoke a lot to me, good Haiku.

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