I teach a poetry-writing course in high school and the kids are also interested in writing song lyrics. I have had no experience with that but try my best to give them some ideas. This is one of my my poor attempts at writing an AAA song which contsists of three verses with a refrain at the end of each.
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The Wedding
Our friends were getting married
And we fought about the gift.
I suggested silverware
But you were for a fifth.
I rolled my eyes and shook my head;
I’d never win, of course.
We were going to a wedding
And heading for divorce.
You sat beside me in the church
But left a space between.
I listened to them say their vows
And swallowed down a scream.
I wondered why you hated me
I didn’t know the source.
We were sitting at a wedding;
I was thinking ‘bout divorce.
Later at the reception
In a silence filled with ache
You stayed on the other side of the room;
I thought my heart would break.
Then I heard them play our song
And felt you touch my back.
We danced and every movement
Put us more and more on track.
Our love was stronger than your fury.
It rocked us with its force.
We were dancing at a wedding
And forgot about divorce.
18 comments:
That one brought a little tear to my eye. If only every wedding could heal so well. BJ
Such a melodic cadence. I love a poem that rhymns and doesn't leave me wondering what I really think.
You could almost waltz to this.
b
Just great. And I understood it at the first read- how refreshing! Let's hope the dance did the trick.
This is a lovely and original take on the prompt. I hope the healing power of "our song" lasted.
haha This is Adorably funny and Definitely could be a song! country of course!
Comes full circle. The dance. Yeah.. until next time-teach
I like the cadence and I am a romantic at hear.
I agree with lucy.
I can totally hear that as a country tune.
What a fun prompt!
Wish it was that easy to forget!
I liked the rhyme and the rhythm. Great way of doing it....
I love this, it is musical without the music. This actually happened to someone I know who I sat with at my niece's wedding last year. they now have a new born daughter. :)
Great rhyme, and such a hopeful piece.
Excellent.
nice rhythm of the words. a country song is fitting
Wonderful piece! I would just love to hear that sung!
Wonderful. I'm a sucker for happy endings. That aside, I thought the cadence was great and the words just perfect.
Another great tissue story!
You know times are a changing I cannot remember the last couple that got married around here I hope weddings don't go out of style.
So should I leave it a mystery and keep writing about it... I think I will. Maybe it will slip out on day. :)
Yes the tissue was need for this one. How I wish I could do this, rhyme, that is. I hope you two can continue to make up like this when differences come between you. Very, very sweet.
Maybe song writing is not so far-fetched an idea for you. I could see women tipping the band to play "their" song, hoping for that dance, after hearing this on the radio.
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