Wednesday, January 18, 2012

3WW: Downhill, Freak, Sliver

Downhill, Freak, Sliver

I sleep later
now that I am
on the downhill
side of life.

Most mornings
I miss the sun
coloring with her
orange crayon.

I awake to watery
yellow and sigh,
but I don't freak
anymore about my age.

I'm letting retirement
carry me along
like a leaf
floating by

in our canal,
buoyant
in the swelling
tides.

I close my eyes,
feel the sun,
and enjoy this last
sliver of time.

18 comments:

  1. Great use of the words... lovely poem...I especially like stanzas 4 and 5.

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  2. For some retirement requies adjustments. It sounds like you have accepted them gracefully. Lovely poem.

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  3. Loved the use of words-painted a really bright picture

    mine was on similar lines, but less cheery :(

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  4. great use of the prompts and very poignant

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  5. Beautiful gentle resignation. I enjoyed this.

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  6. You are lucky to be so relaxed I am kicking and screaming as I go! The poem however was beautiful.

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  7. Lovely use of the words and great outlook on retirement.

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  8. A beautiful use of the words! My mother will love this.

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  9. Sweet... a lady aging gracefully and peacefully.

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  10. Down hill into a beautiful valley of green and treasures..I hope..I love the crayon sun..I imagine how you gave them to your students..beautiful write..Jae

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  11. It's a great way to live, isn't it. This was a lovely read from start to end. Beautiful paint of words.

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  12. really like what you did with the 3 words....nicely done Linda

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  13. This is a very good poem! thank you for it...

    http://wanderwithoutbeinglost.blogspot.com/2012/01/its-only.html

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  14. Very nice. Makes me long for retirement ... but not yet.

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  15. Ah, I wish I could wake on my own. Retirement is a few more years away. Nice use of the prompts. Love the imagery.

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  16. yes, i love this moving on with little worries.... and the sun and time tells the story....

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  17. Vivid a vision you paint with words to strike a chord deep within...

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