Wednesday, September 7, 2011

Erode, Heart, Observe for 3WW

I sit in the twilight
of a rainy dawn

observing how green
everything still is.

Fat oak leaves
slapping the wind,

blades of grass
like bird beaks

open to the drops
of water from the sky,

weeds growing
like babies.

No cold temperatures
have eroded their vibrancy

yet. The heart of summer
beats strong.
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14 comments:

  1. SusannahSeptember 7, 2011 at 8:16 AM

    This is lovely.

    I especially liked....

    Fat oak leaves
    slapping the wind,

    blades of grass
    like bird beaks

    open to the drops
    of water from the sky,

    I really enjoyed reading this. :-)

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  2. Rinkly RimesSeptember 7, 2011 at 8:37 AM

    I like to think of the heart of summer beating strong even after Autumn has arrived.

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  3. Bethe77September 7, 2011 at 10:02 AM

    Beautiful! I love the beauty you captured in this poem from the lingering of Summers heart beat from the Fall coming in.
    Blessings

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  4. christopherSeptember 7, 2011 at 10:17 AM

    lovely luscious lines :)

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  5. DaydreamertooSeptember 7, 2011 at 12:03 PM

    Since September has arrived we have a fresh chill in the air now. I hope we have a long autumn.
    Lovely prose.

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  6. gautami tripathySeptember 7, 2011 at 12:28 PM

    Delicious lines!

    hitching a ride in rusted trails

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  7. andy sewinaSeptember 7, 2011 at 12:38 PM

    Lovely words!

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  8. Sheilagh LeeSeptember 7, 2011 at 1:32 PM

    truly beautiful i could picture this all.

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  9. Jae RoseSeptember 7, 2011 at 1:35 PM

    'Fat Oak Leaves' was a great description...I
    imagine the sound as well as how they look..ungainly in the road..I am glad summer is holding on..if not outside..inside..Jae

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  10. Laurie KolpSeptember 7, 2011 at 3:00 PM

    You have painted a lovely picture... great pieve, Linda!

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  11. Janet Lingel AldrichSeptember 7, 2011 at 3:52 PM

    Lovely job of painting a picture with words.

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  12. Old EggSeptember 8, 2011 at 2:13 AM

    I can remember many many years ago being discouraged from using similes but to use metaphors instead. You have got a very effective mix here.

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  13. Ramesh SoodSeptember 8, 2011 at 7:27 AM

    Good one..

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  14. BerowneSeptember 9, 2011 at 9:10 AM

    Sums up the weather we've all been experiencing. Nicely done.

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