Sunday, September 18, 2011

Betrayal for One Single Impression

Betrayal

The wind takes my breath
and flings it down the beach
out of reach
one breath
after another
stolen
gone
I suck on emptiness.
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4 comments:

  1. ShaunaSeptember 18, 2011 at 12:57 PM

    that is betrayal - you wrote this
    sexy and urgently.

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 18, 2011 at 9:27 PM

    I love your use of words, so simple yet powerful.

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  3. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallSeptember 19, 2011 at 3:01 PM

    apt one...

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  4. UnknownSeptember 19, 2011 at 4:40 PM

    You offer an entirely unique take on the prompt. I love the originality, the staccato feel and the use of traditionally calming images in an antithetical way. Terrific.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/09/18/betrayal/

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