I like to slide
out of bed early
like a letter
out of an envelope
without bumping
anything
so he won’t wake up.
But he stirs
and his first command
of the day
hits me like a knuckle
sandwich. “Turn
the air off.” Yes,
master. He falls back
to sleep and I become
transfixed by the morning.
Today, the trees
are entangled
in a hairnet of fog.
The oak leaves
are shiny as rubber
gloves from the dew.
I sit in the silence
with myself
but only
for a little while.
Fantastic imagery..I like the idea of sliding out of an envelope each morning..I am glad that the silence wasn't for long..Jae
ReplyDeleteI, too, liked that line. The every-dayness of the relationship is nice next to the small natural escape. We all need that. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteNice work with words and imagery. My 3WW: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/06/29/next/
ReplyDeleteGreat imagery.
ReplyDeleteI like the way this flows to a gentle conclusion.
ReplyDeleteI love the strong images, beautiful language here, Linda!
ReplyDeleteEffective and moving! I want to shout to her... "Run!" "Leave!" "Now!"
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Fantastic images. I loved the hairnet of fog. That's great.
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ReplyDeletelove the nature imagery.
keep up the excellence.
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Oh wow. Sliding of bed like a letter from an envelope, hairnet of fog, oak leaves as shiny as rubber gloves...you just strung beautiful images together. Love this.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this. I can't decide if she's a slave/servant or sarcastic and not a morning person. I like the ambiguity.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful, sensitive poem. I think she wishes she could enjoy her silent solitude longer. The 'yes master' comment said it all for me. I agree with Kim Nelson.
ReplyDeleteI smell of slavery here...But yeah, our e'day tonic of tasks are no less than one! Well portrayed...Nice use of words and the simple form was awe-inspiring...the last two lines being the best!
ReplyDeletevery interesting, a haunting quality sadness.
ReplyDeleteTouching, sad, vulnerable, beautiful. I like this very much, Linda!
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