Wednesday, December 9, 2009

Lithe, Grave, Offend for 3WW

The lithe snowflakes twirl
in the sad, offending wind~
I fall on his grave.
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10 comments:

  1. anthonynorthDecember 9, 2009 at 5:17 PM

    A stark last line. Powerful.

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  2. Thom GabrukiewiczDecember 9, 2009 at 9:17 PM

    stark and powerful, yes. Visual, too.

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  3. Joshua St.CyrDecember 10, 2009 at 4:45 AM

    Very short but the message is convey so powerfuly!
    Very deep!

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  4. Joshua St.CyrDecember 10, 2009 at 4:46 AM

    By the way I have one poem up on "One single impression" check it out hope you like it.

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  5. gautami tripathyDecember 10, 2009 at 8:31 AM

    I love that last line.

    gravely offended

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  6. Tumblewords:December 10, 2009 at 1:35 PM

    Strong haiku! Nicely worked.

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  7. PS the PratsieDecember 10, 2009 at 3:30 PM

    read such a wonderful haiku after loong !

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  8. AnonymousDecember 10, 2009 at 6:03 PM

    I love this, the last line took me for sure.

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  9. AnonymousDecember 11, 2009 at 4:40 PM

    The last line got me, too. but there were clues. I love it.

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  10. AnonymousDecember 12, 2009 at 8:21 PM

    It spoke a lot to me, good Haiku.

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