Sunday, October 25, 2009

Elusive for One Single Impression

This poem popped into my head as soon as I saw the prompt. I wrote it almost 20 years ago when I first started writing poetry and everything had to rhyme. What on earth I was upset about, I have no recollection. Maybe nothing since I remember that winter in Bradenton as being a really pleasant one. Maybe I was just exercising my poetic license to be dramatic.
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Barren

My heart is a part of the desert.
My soul is a hole in the sand.
My cares and affairs are all shriveled
suppressed by this desolate land.

My need is the greed of the thirsty.
My wants are the haunts of the mind.
Desires are spires of longing
elusive, delusive, and blind.

3/16/91
Bradenton, Florida
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22 comments:

  1. SandyCarlsonOctober 25, 2009 at 8:27 AM

    Desires...how they shape the soul in their elusive way.

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  2. PS the PratsieOctober 25, 2009 at 9:10 AM

    This can make sucha lovely sad song ! lovely :)

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  3. Loch RobOctober 25, 2009 at 9:52 AM

    To be thirsty and lost in the desert. Blind desire, driven by needs and wants. Very well done!

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  4. JeevesOctober 25, 2009 at 10:04 AM

    Wow.....

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  5. Amias (ljm and liquidplastic)October 25, 2009 at 10:45 AM

    20 years ago huh ... well you took some very good poetic license here. I especially love the way you used elusive, delusive and blind ... that is so true for many today!

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  6. Sherri B.October 25, 2009 at 11:04 AM

    The rhyming makes it flow so beautifully...and the words have such depth and meaning. Wonderful!

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  7. GlowbyOctober 25, 2009 at 11:40 AM

    This flows so naturally. Yes, like a song.

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  8. anthonynorthOctober 25, 2009 at 1:13 PM

    Great flow to this, and real depth, too.

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  9. ifOctober 25, 2009 at 2:02 PM

    words full of feeling...

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  10. FelicityOctober 25, 2009 at 2:05 PM

    Perhaps it's because I've been feeling rather despondent lately, but this poem really touched me. I could relate to it very well. Thank you for sharing this. :)

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  11. Cassiopeia RisesOctober 25, 2009 at 4:20 PM

    Oh yes how true your words are. Well done.

    love, Melanie

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  12. MaggieOctober 25, 2009 at 4:38 PM

    Your pen sure was not barren as this poem flowed so well and it is timeless.

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  13. JimOctober 25, 2009 at 5:29 PM

    Hi Linda, you ending is extra nice in my book, "Desires are spires of longing elusive, delusive, and blind." I still like the rhyme and meter thing here too.
    ..

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  14. Tumblewords:October 25, 2009 at 9:23 PM

    Two decades old and this piece still hooks and leads. Nice, oh nice!

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  15. JP/debOctober 25, 2009 at 11:16 PM

    Definitely a dramatic poem! Funny after 20 years you have no connection to the emotional history of this poem ... I've been there!

    Cheers,
    JP/deb

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  16. Yellow TulipOctober 26, 2009 at 3:19 AM

    wow:)...very lovely poem dear:)..jus loved it:)...

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  17. JukotaOctober 26, 2009 at 6:36 PM

    I don't write many rhyming poems, but I love a good one, and this one was awesome! My favorite line: My soul is a hole in the sand... Wow!

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  18. AnonymousOctober 27, 2009 at 12:28 AM

    yeah!this longing is so tough..

    very nice post..

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  19. AnonymousOctober 28, 2009 at 6:41 AM

    Glad you kept it. I think we have all felt that way at one time or another.

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  20. AnonymousOctober 28, 2009 at 9:22 AM

    sad.. so poetic!! desires are elusive, delusive and blind. indeed they are!

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  21. Tammie LeeOctober 28, 2009 at 9:44 PM

    this is a wonderful piece of accountability for desires, needs and wants.
    Fun that you pulled out an old piece.
    Spirithelpers

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  22. PattiOctober 28, 2009 at 9:46 PM

    I love the line "My wants are the haunts of the mind." ...this is very true. Nicely written!

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