Friday, April 17, 2009

NaPoWriMo Day 17: Missing

Vitamin Sea Deficiency

The ocean
is locked in a box
in the back corner
of my brain.

I can barely see
the tiny waves
rolling over themselves

or the glints
of sun sparkling
like fireflies,
ephemeral & brief.

Soon, soon, the screen
of the ocean
will be as large
as a drive-in

and I’ll be sitting
in the audience
with my eyes
full of sea.
at

12 comments:

  1. swissApril 17, 2009 at 4:22 PM

    day 17's poem was so utterly cheerless for me that this was just what i needed. i grew up on an island and that first stanza is exactly how i feel about the sea. genuine thanks winging their way to where ever you're at!

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  2. rob kistnerApril 17, 2009 at 5:25 PM

    I really like the juxtaposition of the tiny box and the giant outdoor screen. It gave great power to the realization of the object of your longing...

    ...rob

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  3. AnonymousApril 17, 2009 at 5:36 PM

    Oh! What a beautiful depiction of the ocean. You have made me miss the water today LOL. GREAT job!

    http://lori102870.blogspot.com/2009/04/in-your-absencenapowrimo-17-part-2by-me.html

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  4. Jeremiah's HouseApril 17, 2009 at 6:45 PM

    Linda, Very nice poem.

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  5. desert ratApril 17, 2009 at 6:54 PM

    I just loved that. So perfectly captured. Makes me long for the sea.

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  6. Bsquared86April 17, 2009 at 8:09 PM

    vivid images and well written! thank you for sharing!

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  7. Liz at Yips and HowlsApril 17, 2009 at 8:09 PM

    This is for very moving for me. I also have the same longing for the sea (mixed with longings for mountains, deserts, canyons, etc).

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  8. AnonymousApril 17, 2009 at 8:44 PM

    That title is just about the best thing I've heard in a very long time!! And the poem makes me want to jump in a car and drive...all the way to that screen.

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  9. Erin DavisApril 17, 2009 at 9:02 PM

    Oh, Linda. I love this! Such longing...

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  10. GavinApril 17, 2009 at 9:16 PM

    Very lovely, I never thought of carrying it with me!

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  11. Christine GailApril 17, 2009 at 9:43 PM

    Loved 'with my eyes full of sea"!
    Wonderfully written!

    i've always been drawn to the sea.Enjoyed this much!

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  12. AnonymousApril 19, 2009 at 6:07 PM

    I love the images you've used here and the title is spot on.

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