Agree Execute Providence
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They met in Providence
at an insurance convention.
Two lost and lonely souls
looking for excitement.
She sent the buzzing bees
of her need straight
to the hive of his heart
and he got stuck
in the honey of her stare.
They spent the night
and both were amazed
at how creatively
the other was able to execute
maneuvers to please.
In the morning they agreed
to meet again the next year
then headed back to their spouses
and jobs and lives
humming a buzzing tune,
their steps lighter, like flying.
Quite a twist at the end. Having been cheated on - now divorced - it hit me funny. But I read it again and you've done a good job building the passion. Just can't quite get past those two lines.
ReplyDeleteNot what I expected from the beginning - nicely done!
ReplyDeletedidn't see that one coming!
ReplyDeletegreat job
wouldn't it be a joy if those 'same time next year' type relationships really worked out.. i am thinking i may have several .....
ReplyDeleteCertainly unexpected. I specifically enjoyed the lines:
ReplyDelete'She sent the buzzing bees
of her need straight
to the hive of his heart
and he got stuck
in the honey of her stare.'
I can literally see the enchantment.
It can happen like that. AND it can save marriages.
ReplyDeleteA strange world.
You had my attention! I did get stuck on those two lines as well... infidelity makes me infinitely sad. But then, I don't know about their spouses, or their lives, or their hearts. Anyway, I was hooked from line 1. Great job!
ReplyDeleteLike that ending. Great!
ReplyDeleteDepth of hell pours forth tirade of words
I was surprised by the initial cheekiness, Linda. Then the unexpected twist and the piece took on a darker, ironic tone and that is like you: to impact the reader.
ReplyDelete"he got stuck in the honey of her
ReplyDeletestare" sweet line, hot poem.