Thursday, November 15, 2007

Totally Optional Prompt for Nov. 15: Neighbors Saw

This Is What the Neighbors Saw

At first,
A campfire
licking the stars,

an empty
Coors Light can,
a half-filled
margarita glass,

two people
dancing
to “Beautiful Tonight”
on the deck.

Later,
smoldering embers,
a deserted deck,
lights winking off
in the camp.
at

10 comments:

  1. Tumblewords:November 15, 2007 at 9:39 PM

    Lovely 'place'!

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  2. Annie JeffriesNovember 16, 2007 at 2:19 AM

    Very romantic. I can smell the campfire smoke.

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  3. Crafty Green PoetNovember 16, 2007 at 3:40 AM

    You really recreate place with very few words here, excellent

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  4. RethabileNovember 16, 2007 at 4:37 AM

    Cool. I like the mood we leave the poem with.

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  5. AnonymousNovember 16, 2007 at 9:25 AM

    That's quite lovely.

    (Here via TOP.)

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  6. Andy SewinaNovember 16, 2007 at 1:42 PM

    You've definately captured the sense of place - but, I wonder what the neighbours thought?

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  7. AnonymousNovember 17, 2007 at 7:43 AM

    Great last stanza!

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  8. OdessaNovember 18, 2007 at 12:23 AM

    very romantic. love the image of lights winking off.

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  9. AnonymousNovember 18, 2007 at 1:52 AM

    Maybe the preface to "How to get a live."

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  10. AnonymousNovember 18, 2007 at 4:38 AM

    Concise & slight in length but full of atmosphere.

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